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ESSAY 6 The Competitive Itch- a chaffing we all crave to scratch, but only some succeed while others fail, sometimes taking to desperate measures. What is the cure? The Grading system. As we progress through our school years putting in so much hard work and dedication, we all yearn for a good higher education. Yet what we desire most is not so easy to get, because that is the craving of so many other millions of students. The result, the competitive itch, destroying balances creating tension and desperation and students living on tenterhooks, wondering if they qualify and what if something goes slightly wrong- a half mark can cause a life upset. To remedy this tense situation the grading system seems the best and definitely what I support. |
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| The base of the grading system is simple-Colleges look most thoroughly at an applicants resume. Leadership roles and well-rounded, involved students are appealing to the most elite educational institutions. But all this is possible only if the students can qualify for these colleges. Which is a problem with the strict cut offs. Now is it fair to judge a student solely by marks when he or she could have been involved in many other extra curricular things or sports? Is it fair to depress and hurt a student when it is maybe not his fault that he scored a mark more or a mark less than someone who was just as good or bad as him or her? Do not these students deserve a chance? With about 245 students names for the second list where there where half a mark differences a college last year was forced to choose only 27 students out of these. What about the life of the others? |
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Because they struggle to gain leadership roles and become the
well-rounded students colleges desire, the task of
maintaining stringent marks competing with the best is a
struggle for many students. Sometimes you may tr your best
and be really good but the population of the country being
such there is always someone better than you
somewhere.However, colleges don't consider this when they
seek applicants through the marking system. Even while the
college teachers might understand the desperation of those
who do not make it, the marking system forces out the chances
of students even before being considered. In the need of the
hour, which is to be competent at everything and be able to
pay diverse roles are we being fair to students. The grading system would give the students a chance to be considered on their merit rather than just marks. |
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An important issue here being that since in India we do not choose subjects as our major we are still providing marks of five subjects when actually the discipline we want to take requires us to be good at only one. After all if I want to do Economics, why my Physics or Chemistry marks be counted. At least the grading system will help me qualify. With less pressure and more time, grades would improve for all dedicated students, as would the enjoyment of studying those subjects and the increased retainment of what we learned in those classes. |
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School is the foundation of the rest of our life. Like money
in the bank, the investment of an additional year when we are
young can make all the difference. With the pressures reduced
motivated students would be able to become more involved in
their schools, boost their grades, and find the time for a
job and community service. Colleges all over the world admire
these attributes, and for the sake of students our education
system needs to refurbish itself. Position on Issue This essay demonstrates effective skill in responding to the writing task. The essay takes a position on the issue (To remedy this tense situation the grading system seems the best and definitely what I support. Development of Ideas There is context for discussion while the complexity of the issue is addressed as the writer anticipates and responds to a counter-argument to the discussion (Even while the college teachers might understand the desperation of those who do not make it, the marking system forces out the chances of students even before being considered). Clarity Clear focus on the specific issue in the prompt is maintained. Organization in Essay Organization of the essay is clear though predictable.Most of the essay demonstrates logical sequencing of ideas (An important issue here being that since in India we do not choose subjects as our major we are still providing marks of five subjects when actually the discipline we want to take requires us to be good at only one. After all if I want to do Economics, why my Physics or Chemistry marks should be counted. The grading system will help me at least qualify.) Sentence Structure and Word Choice The essay shows a good command of language, with precise and varied sentences and word choice (The Competitive Itch- a chaffing we all crave to scratch, but only some succeed while others fail, sometimes taking to desperate measures.There are few errors to distract the reader. Transitions for going from one sentence to the other and connecting sentences are used throughout the essay (Yet, As a result, At least….). Language Usage The conclusion and especially the introduction are effective and well developed.Length of the Essay always counts. Sample Score =6 |
